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Hmmmm, tricky question… I'll have to consult this matter with Mr. Snozzle… Mr. Snozzle? I need to ask you something… Pardon? Greta? Yes, she's retired for the night. Now, I was going to ask you…
Never mind, I need to be on my way. Take care, Mrs. Sullivan.
Very well, it was nice talking to you, dearie.
Yes, Mrs. Sullivan. Have a nice evening. Goodbye.
Bye, dearie.
Now, where were we? Oh yes, time for a cuppa... No, Mr. Snozzle, no more biscuits for you. You've practically eaten us out of house and home lately. You really ought to control yourself.
asked Jul 23, 2016 in Arts and Humanities by smyadmin

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It is very difficult to follow because you are not using the punctuation which usually accompanies dialogue. Is this some kind of experiment? If so I don't really think it works. I cannot work out who is talking to whom in the first sentence, but 'Mrs Sullivan' is over-emphasised in the next two.
answered Jul 23, 2016 by moscl

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